Tuesday, 8 May 2018

LO4: Evaluation

The brief for this unit was as follows:

You have been asked by local community radio station, Sheffield Live!  to create a new and original radio show or drama.
You will create the first 5-10 minutes of the new radio show/ drama and include:
  1. Presenters/ voice actors 
  2. News bulletin
  3. Feature/ interview/ narrative 
  4. Jingle/ theme music 
  5. Bedding music/ sound/ effects
  6. Original advert
  7. Competition/ social media links

In this I feel the our script was successful in this as that we have targeted a large demographic that is of prevalence in the local area, that being students, and most of the content is centred around the local area such as the music played and the stories in ur news section. We have also featured original adverts from advertisers who are companies which are both local and would appeal to our target audience. 
As I have stated in my codes and conventions work my script includes all of the sections included above as to fit with the usual format of a radio morning show.

The script went through several variations so that we could make sure that the final version was exactly how we wanted it to be and up to a professional standard. Below I have inserted some of the changes that I had to make to the script for it to reach the standard I wanted. 

Version 1:

The first version of our script had many issues. Firstly it was too short and the different sections of the show did not receive the amount of attentionn they deserved (for example the News and Sports sections together were less than 2 minutes of time.) As well as this the script was not formatted properly as that it featured the name of a presenter and then what they were waying, not including the chart system that all subsequent versions would come to rely on. 
We improved this first version by giving it the correct layout which I found by studying the scripts of other radio breakfast shows such as "Big John at Breakfast" and "The Steve Bailey Show." Listening to these shows also helped us to understand the chemistry that needed to exist between our presenters in order to make the show entertaining to watch as well as the necessity of sound effects to making the show sound professional. 

Version 2: 

The second version of the product again made us aware that there were vital changes that had to be made if it were to be appropriate for our client. Firstly we had to make sure that there were no long paragraphs of writing for one presenter to say otherwise it wouldn't seem like the show which celebrated the relationships between its three presenters that we wanted to create. As well as this I had to make sure that there were no spelling or grammatical issues with the script so that it would seem professional to the client when we handed it in for them to check through it. 
In this draft I made the scrip into a chart and provided each line with a timecode  which stated  how long each line needed to last.

Version 3: 

As to now I have been writing about changes that we chose to make to our script. It was this version of the script however that we handed to client for inspection for the first time. This means that I have a saved version of the feedback given to us by them which I will insert below: 










 The first page shows the general changes that the client saw as fitting for our script. the first being that they would like to have an advert on pages 4 and 6 as well as a track of "bedding music" (that being music that is played under dialogue to provide atmosphere) to be put under the whole thing.



















 The changes suggested on this page are a different version of timecodes, bedding music, addition of a jingle and a fade out at the end of our advertisement.
 The only mistake on this page was an error in grammar.





















































































When these changes were made we had the final version of the script which I have uploaded to my blog. In conclusion I feel that this is a script which fits the codes and conventions of a radio show very closely and will therefore be able to keep an audience entertained. 
Below i have inserted the Final script for SCC radio:
















Production name:
Sheffield City Radio
Episode #1




































Charlotte: [Show begins at 6am]

6:00:00-6:00:10

[sound effect: SCC radio Jingle]

Good morning everyone and welcome to SCC Radio  The home of Sheffield student NEWS and conversation! with Frazer Mclean,
Matt:

6:00:10-6:00:11


Charlotte Cass,
Frazer:

6:00:11-6:00:12


And Matt Frost. 
Charlotte:

6:00:12-6:00:17

Today we have the biggest stories facing the region as well as a really interesting discussion section for you all to enjoy!

Matt:

6:00:17-6:00:20


Let’s jump right in with our News section! Right after a word from our sponsor.


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6:00:20-6:00:45
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Frazer:

6:00:45-6:00:46

Today in the news-
Sound effect:
6:00:46-6:00:47
[Ringing bell]

Frazer:

6:00:47-6:01:00



an academy chain has been cleared of financial wrongdoing after a police investigation


Sound effect:


6:01:00-6:01:01

[Ringing bell]

Charlotte:

6:01:00-6:01:10


A statement has been released by the police stating that they are "confident in learning more about the fatal stabbing of a father of three


Sound effect:

6:01:10-6:01:11

[Ringing bell]

Frazer:

6:01:11-6:00:16

a beloved Sheffield band has announced their new album and tour dates




Sound effect:

6:01:16-6:01:17


[Ringing bell]

Frazer:

6:01:17-6:01:25


and new plans have been unveiled as to how drones could be used to combat rising South Yorkshire crime rates.


Sound effect:

6:01:25-6:01:40


[News Jingle]



Frazer:

6:01:40-6:01:45


But first our top story today is that the Wakefield Academy trust has been cleared of any wrongdoing in light of a police investigation.


Charlotte:

6:01:45-6:01:50

Suspicion was raised in relation to the finances of the company last September when an abrupt announcement was made that they would no longer be running 21 of their locations including the Sheffield based Yewlands academy.


Charlotte:

6:01:50-6:02:00

Our next story concerns the Murder of young father of three Jarvin.

Frazer:

6:02:00-6:02:02


Our next story concerns the Murder of young father of three Jarvin.

Matt:

6:02:00-6:02:10

The police have stated that they are confident in catching his killer or killers but have urged the public to come forward with “Nuggets of information” that may assist with the in the investigation

Charlotte:

6:02:10-6:02:15

Next it has been revealed that south Yorkshire police are looking into plans which will see drones used to combat the rising crime in the Sheffield area. 

Frazer:

6:02:15-6:02:20

Yes, the drones are going to take to the skies at night scanning the ground for any suspicious activity. This is a trial of a planned national use of the technology. 




Matt:

6:02:20-6:02:25



And today’s final story. The Arctic Monkeys have announced their 2018 tour and a new studio album titled “Tranquillity Base Hotel and Casino” 

Frazer:

6:02:25-6:02:30

The band will be touring the nation and playing two dates in Sheffield on the 18th and 19th of September at the Fly DSA arena. 

Charlotte:

6:02:30-6:02:35

That’s all for the news today which means it’s time to move onto sport.
[End of News section]

Sound effect:

6:02:35-6:02:55
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Charlotte:

6:02:55-6:03:00
[Start of sports section]
[sports jingle]
This weekend we saw Daniel Ricciardo won the Chinese grand prix after Max Verstappen and Sebastien Vettel collided with each other and Lewis Hamilton called his performance a “disaster’. 


Frazer:

6:03:00-6:03:10

It has been a hard start to the F1 season for Lewis Hamilton after finishing 4th this weekend and not having won a race yet this season leaving him in 2nd place on the leader board below Sebastian Vettel. 


Charlotte:

6:03:10-6:03:15

In boxing news, Heavy weight boxer Tyson Fury announced his long anticipated return to the ring for the 9th June at the Manchester arena against an unconfirmed opponent. 


Frazer:

6:03:15-6:03:17


Who do you want to see him fight ? 


Charlotte:

6:03:17-6:03:23


I would really like to see him fight AJ I think that would be a massive fight, but Joshua has his WBA mandatory challenger Alexander Povetkin to fight first, which leaves Deontay wilder open for a big showdown between Fury and Wilder. 



Frazer:

6:03:23-6:03:35


At the Commonwealth games in Australia the England team win the gold in women’s netball, beating the Australian favourites 52-51."It's my dream come true," said head coach Neville. 


Charlotte:

6:03:35-6:03:43

Manchester City won the premier league title on Sunday after Manchester United lost in a shock 1-0 defeat to West Brom.


Frazer:

6:03:43-6:04:00
In a post-match interview Jose Mourinho said that Manchester united ‘Over complicated things’, which led to their defeat against West Brom

That’s all in the sports for today.
[End of sports section]

Charlotte:
6:04:00-6:04:05

Now it’s time for some Tunes to get your day started right!


Sound effect:

6:04:05-6:04:45
·         (Audio)"Fluorescent Adolescent" - "The Arctic Monkeys" (Source: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5yy8J067pYc). [play 20 secs]

·         "Feel It Still" - "Portugal. The Man" (Source: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PdKKoOiEgqY) [Play 20 secs]
Charlotte:

6:04:45-6:04:52

[Start of discussion section]

Good morning guys, I hope everyone’s having a good day so far So today. Welcome to our daily “Discussion section” where we talk about problems that you are facing. our topic of discussion today will be flatmate horror.

Frazer:

6:04:52-6:04:57

We asked you guys to tweet in your stories and I must admit some of them are intense. [Laughs]We took the time to sift through and find he worst ones.

Hopefully we can try give positive advice.

Charlotte:

6:04:57-6:05:03

okay so the first story is about two rival flats who took it so far that a tree ended up in the oppositions flat.

Frazer:

6:05:03-6:05:07



I never understood how flats rivalled like this. See my accommodation was calm and everyone just got along really but how?
Matt:

6:05:07-6:05:09



I know right like, What happened for a tree to end up in the fight for who’s better?
Charlotte:

6:05:09-6:05:12


Basically, it says here that both flats were filled with sports students, the rugby team and the football team were constantly at each other’s necks for which is the better sport.

Frazer:

6:05:12-6:05:17

It’s started off fun because they were always hosting iconic parties such as the take down. They were super dramatic and filled with testosterone but one day the footy lads wanted to show their strength.

Matt:

6:05:17-6:05:20


They all came together and put a tree through the rugby houses kitchen window

Frazer:

6:05:20-6:05:24

Oh wow, that’s quite something. I mean I can understand why the footballers wanted to showcase their strength but this is definitely a step too far.
Charlotte:

6:05:24-6:05:26


solutions? Maybe first off, al don’t shove trees through people’s windows.
Frazer:

6:05:26-6:05:29


[laughs] Yeah, I don’t think I have much to say. Maybe keep the rivalry on the field.
Charlotte:

6:05:29-6:05:40

Going back to what I was saying earlier, my flat didn’t have tension but, in the beginning, I remember there being one occasion where there was almost a fight because one girl accidentally set the kitchen on fire.


Frazer:

6:05:40-6:05:42


Did the girl happen to be you?


Charlotte:

6:05:42-6:05:48

[laughs] No. So what had happened was one girl has set up the toaster but she put the instructions in the crumb tray.


Matt:

6:05:48-6:05:53

She thought it was storage so fast forward. Someone goes to use her toaster and a fire starts.
Frazer:

6:05:53-6:05:56


My flat mate had managed to put it out but the toaster was ruined.

Charlotte:


6:05:57-6:06:10

So my flatmate freaked out because he wasn’t supposed to use it he did just out of laziness. He tried to hide the toaster and act as if it was never there but she was very insistent that we had a group meeting.

Matt:

6:06:10-6:06:12

He confessed and we all put money towards a communal toaster.

Charlotte:

6:06:12-6:06:17

ah you see. That’s a really good way to solve an issue.  If you’ve just tuned in we’re taking about flatmate horror stories. Tweet us @SHURadio to get involved. We’ve got more after the break
Frazer:

6:06:17-6:06:23

we asked you to vote a topic and roommate horror stories by far won. Our Twitter has been going mad for the past couple of days with your story submissions


Charlotte:

6:06:23-
6:06:27

we’ve talked about the toaster that divided the flat, rugby vs football but I think the worst submission we’ve had is the mouldy kitchen


Frazer:

6:06:27-6:06:35

This story is quite something. We didn’t think we would be able to give the story justice so we had our friend Liz write it down for us. Here’s what she said:


Charlotte:

6:06:35-6:06:40


Okay so it says here: I’ve had problems with flat mates since I joined uni and I’m in my third year but when I was in my first I lived in halls like everyone else.

Matt:

6:06:40-6:06:45


There was this girl and she’d always leave her pots and plates all over.
Charlotte:

6:06:45-6:06:53

This doesn’t sound too bad but one day I was cooking and I saw her grab a pot that had been used for spaghetti or something. She’d left it there for so long that there was mould in the pot.

Matt:

6:06:53-6:06:57


And I watched her empty the pot but she didn’t wash it at all. She just left the mould floating in the sink.
Charlotte:

6:06:57-6:07:06

That was strike one. I went into her room once to borrow something and literally every plate/ bowl had some form of moulding food and she always complained that she was getting sick.


Matt:

6:07:06-6:07:10

So as a good Simaritians I decided to mention to her that it’s not helping her health, we got into an argument and she reported me for bullying.

Charlotte:

6:07:10-6:07:15
I had to go through so much to prove that I wasn’t and that’s when I realised that some people just don’t want help.
Frazer:

6:07:15-6:07:20

Oh wow that’s quite a story! So did she have to speak to the head of the building or something? Because I know usually they just give you a warning.


Charlotte:

6:07:20-6:07:45

She’s written here “the accommodation had a no billing policy (obviously) and they view issues like that very serious so they were considering kicking me out and due to recent issues amongst students. It was a time that bulling was almost on a rise and I had to get all my flat mates to help me with my appeal to the case. It was very intense and I remember the girl finding it funny. I didn’t mean to offend her I was just being helpful but innit but I guess not everyone likes that.”

Matt:

6:07:45-6:07:48


She said that she just stayed away from her and didn’t speak to her again.

Frazer:

6:07:48-6:07:53

that’s quite a mature thing to do because it would be an instinct for a lot of people to get very riled up and argue which I suppose is a normal reaction to someone lying.


Charlotte:

6:07:53-6:07:57

I can’t even imagine what I would do in that situation. Plus the stress of exams and keeping on top of work. It all worked out good for her in the end so that’s good.


Sound effect:





6:07:57-6:08:37

[Music]
·         "She's Electric" - "Oasis" (Source: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jILwt5DQk8A) [play 20 secs]


[Jingle]


Charlotte:

6:08:37-6:08:45

get involved on Twitter with the hashtag #mouldylies to let us know what you would do if your flatmate did the same.


Frazer:

6:08:45-6:08:50


Emilee said “ I think I’d go nuts and show them the room. She should’ve got kicked out for health reasons”


Charlotte:

6:08:50-6:09:10

@D_zilla has said “if I was her then I would have taken pictures of her room and her mess in the kitchen. What she did was vile and so is her behaviour. #reportthereporter


Frazer:

6:09:10-6:09:15

[laughs] well that’s a very good solution to a very big problem. Get at us at @shu #reporthereporter we want to hear from you

[End of discussion section]


Matt:

6:09:15-6:09:20

Unfortunately that’s all we have time for today. Be sure to tune back in to us same time tomorrow for more of the latest news, sports and top hits. Bye for now.
[Fade out]
[Play station jingle again.]







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In conclusion I feel that this final version of the script fits all of the different ruirements of the brief and effectively targets our audience. Ain spite of this however our programme dos not include a competition and therefore cannot fully be said to meet the brief. In spite of this rather small deviation from the brief I feel that as a group we have created a professional product which would accurately target out 18-24 year old target audience.